Showing posts with label Gill James. Show all posts
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Tuesday, 6 January 2026

Janaury Stones by Gill James

 

When Time Went Crazy

The Jenkins were not the sort of people to party all night, right through to breakfast. In their youth maybe, but not these days.  Nevertheless, there they were, eating brunch and wondering where the night had gone.

“Did we finish the wine last night?”

“I don’t think so. We didn’t play Scrabble either.”

It was a real puzzle. The last either could remember before they started breakfast was that they hadn’t quite finished their dessert from the evening before.

Something must have happened, though, because they were wearing different clothes now. 

“It’s really funny,” he said. “That lemon sorbet was making me quite full but I’m starving now. What’s going on?”

“It’s weird about the photos as well,” she replied.

They carried on looking at the shots of Gibraltar on his phone. They weren’t due to go there until the next day.

As the plane landed he shook his head. “I was looking forward to my beach day on Sunday. Now I’ve got to go to work tomorrow.”

A short while later they were lying on the sun beds at the beach.

“I think I must be dreaming,” he said.

“Well, so am I then.  But don’t you think it’s funny that we’re both having the same dream?”

“Hmm.”

“Anyway, don’t forget the photos.” She picked up his iPhone and started searching. “Oh my. It looks as if our Sandra will marry Tony after all.”

She handed him the phone. There was their daughter in a flowing white dress and Tony smarter than they’d ever seen him before. Judging by the colour of the leaves on the trees it was already autumn, but was that this year or another one?                    

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Monday, 10 March 2025

Veiled Dreams Chapter Two

 

Chapter Two

 

Jan

 

There was no one in front of him as he raced across the long dyke. It was already light. The water on his left was tepid and lifeless. Even at this hour, the heat was draining the country of energy, but the speed of the bike gave him a welcome breeze. He was probably going faster than he should have, but he didn’t care now. For once, the bikers’ meet had been a bore. He had to go, even though he hadn’t wanted to this time. After all, he was their chairman, and the Baeyk Motel only allowed them all there if he was present. He could never work out why they thought he was a good influence. Perhaps it was just because he didn’t drink heavily.

He sped up a notch. He could think of nothing but her, probably still sleeping now. It was the school holidays and she’d asked to go with him, but he couldn’t take her. She wouldn’t be allowed in the bars and he couldn’t leave her alone in the motel. That would have been terrible for her. Besides, he’d set off during school time. No way would her parents have let her go. Maybe next year, when she was older, when they knew him better, and they were sure the epilepsy was under control.

He was soon on the outskirts of the city. It was beginning to wake up. Front doors opened and the traffic was building. There would surely be a flower seller open somewhere? He’d go straight to her, only stopping to buy the biggest bunch of flowers he had the money for, leaving just enough to buy breakfast. Best not even go home and shower first, which would show her that he’d come straight round there.

The traffic slowed him down. There was a storm going on inside him. Six months now they’d been together, and his stomach still churned before he went to meet her. The thought of seeing her still edged his days with gold. He stopped at the traffic lights, revving the bike, but it didn’t make him feel any better.

The lights changed to green. He swung round the corner, off the wide boulevard and into the main shopping street near where she lived. It was a good job the other traffic was slow, or he would have been speeding for sure. There were speed cameras everywhere. It was just like being with her. He had to be careful all the time. She was underage, after all. She often teased him, about being old-fashioned. Sometimes, she said he didn’t care — didn’t find her attractive. If only she knew what he really thought. But he wouldn’t rush and spoil anything, not for the world. This girl was important. More important than any other girl he had been with.

He inched forward to the next set of lights, where he needed to turn right into her street. Good. The flower seller was already there and opening up his booth. Jan parked the bike.

‘What can you do for thirty euros?’ he asked. ‘With plenty of colour in it?’

‘What about five of these,’ said the vendor, beginning to take some huge yellow lilies out of a bucket. ‘And six of those?’ he suggested, pointing to some equally big fiery red flowers, which looked a bit like dragons heads with tongues sticking out.

Jan nodded. They were exactly right. They reminded him of Christina, dramatic, colourful and beautiful, and a little bit angry.

He watched impatiently as the merchant spent what seemed like hours, putting the flowers together. He worked carefully, adding in a few bits of green and one or two smaller blue colours. Finally, he added the little packet of the magic formula, which helped to keep the flowers fresh, and then skilfully wrapped the whole bouquet in cellophane in such a way that the flowers were protected without being squashed.

‘There you are, sir,’ said the merchant, handing the bouquet over. ‘Make sure she puts them in water straight away, and remind her to cut two centimetres off the stems first, and not to forget to put the powder into the water.’ He tapped the side of his nose and winked at Jan. ‘I hope they have the desired effect.’

Jan stowed the flowers carefully into the little space he had left in the luggage compartment of his bike, and turned down into Christina’s street. He felt slightly sick, and his pulse was beginning to race. Sometimes, he thought he could do without this relationship — always the tension. He was always worrying what she might think and trying to guess whether she felt the same about him. But, no, he couldn’t give her up. It just made so much difference to him. Life was grand, because Christina existed.

Five minutes later he was outside her apartment block, the bike parked again. Breathing in and out slowly several times, he rang the bell. There was no reply for a while. That was something, he supposed. It meant that her parents were already out at work, so at least he wouldn’t have to see them. Then the waiting became too much. He lifted his hand to ring the bell again, but just as he was about to press it, the buzzer sounded. His heart missed a beat.

‘Hello, who’s there?’ said a sleepy voice. Something sank inside Jan. It was Paul, her brother. Yet it was almost a relief.

‘Hi, it’s me. Jan de Vries,’ replied Jan.

‘You’d better come on in,’ replied Paul, now slightly less sleepily. ‘She’s not up yet. I’ll go and wake her.’

The buzzer sounded again, and the front door swung open. Paul was standing in the hallway in his dressing gown.

‘Go on in,’ he said. ‘I’ll go and get her up. Would you like a coffee?’

‘It’s okay, thanks,’ replied Jan. ‘I thought I’d take her out to breakfast.’

Paul wandered off towards Christina’s bedroom. Jan sat in the lounge nursing the flowers. He was grimy and sticky from the journey anyway. The lounge was impeccable — nothing out a place and not a speck of dust anywhere. He was a complete misfit. But hopefully, she would be glad to see him, and the little argument they’d had just before he’d left would be completely forgotten. He hoped she’d love the flowers, and going out to breakfast, and perhaps now gradually, her parents would start to accept him. He even thought of getting his hair cut, but she’d told him so often how much she loved his long blonde hair. Soon she would be older. They would be able to take things further, and she’d be able to come on more of the biker trips with him. He’d even be willing to give up that for her, but that was another of the things she said she liked about him. If he became too much Mr Sensible, she’d go off him. He even worried sometimes that she didn’t quite approve of the fact that he didn’t smoke, drink or do drugs. Well, not much, anyway.

What were they doing? He hoped she wasn’t unwell. Then he heard the raised voices.

Christina’s voice was hard to hear. But he could make out ‘ever — again — have gone — flowers where the sun…’

‘Oh come, on,’ he heard Paul say. ‘He’s waiting out there with a great big bunch of flowers. Come and sort it out, won’t you?’

A door slammed. Paul reappeared in the lounge.

‘She won’t speak to you,’ he said.

‘Oh well,’ said Jan getting up. What else could he do? He was sorry about going to the meet, but well, if he was going to carry on being a biker, he’d had to go. And she wanted him to be a biker.

‘Look, Jan,’ said Paul. ‘I can’t make her come out. You’ll have to try again later.’

‘I’ll leave the flowers, then,’ said Jan.

A door suddenly opened. Christina rushed into the lounge. Her green eyes were flashing, her thick dark curls were mussed from sleep. Still, something leapt up in him as he saw her.

‘You can keep your bloody flowers,’ she said. ‘Don’t come near me again. If you can’t put me first, it’s all off.’

She rushed back to her room. Paul shrugged his shoulders. Jan could do nothing but leave. The lump in his throat was so huge he couldn’t swallow — could hardly breathe. He couldn’t lose her, he just couldn’t.

Mrs Van Bredow, the Grants’ next-door neighbour was just coming in. She was a little woman, with dark and wrinkled skin, who shuffled everywhere with the aid of a walking stick. It was arthritis, she’d explained to him one day as she watched him mending his bike outside the apartment.

‘Oh, what lovely flowers,’ she exclaimed and beamed at Jan. ‘For Christina?’

Jan managed to nod.

‘Oh, there’s no one in?’ she asked. ‘I’ll take them, if you like, and see that she gets them.’

Jan didn’t speak.

A slight cloud passed over the old lady’s face.

‘Oh, she didn’t want them?’ she said.

‘No,’ said Jan, suddenly finding his voice. ‘You may as well keep them, Mrs Van Bredow. Enjoy!’

He thrust the bouquet into her arms, and went to leave. Mrs Van Bredow grabbed his arm, quite strongly, Jan thought, for someone in so much pain. She looked him straight in the eyes and Jan felt as if she was trying to tell him something.

‘Don’t give up on her, don’t give up.’

She let herself into the apartment, still clutching the flowers.

The day had lost its colour. The heat and the traffic were just a nuisance. Despite the bright sun, everything seemed grey. He wanted to get back now to his apartment and have a shower and then just sleep, try to forget, and then perhaps when he’d had a good rest, he could think what to do to make her come round.

But there was another problem waiting for him sitting on the doorstep to the tall old canal-side house his apartment was in. Susanne Richards. Her parents rented the two floors below him and she was at school with Christina. She was always hanging around.

‘Not seeing Christina, today, then?’ she asked. ‘I’d have thought you would have been gagging for it, after being away for all that time. I know, I bet she’s sent you back home to have a shower first. Little miss high and mighty.’

‘I’m too tired for this,’ said Jan. ‘Could you move, so I can get in?’

‘Have you two fallen out?’ asked Susanne, grinning.

‘No…not really,’ muttered Jan. What business was it of hers? ‘No we haven’t. Not at all.’ He wished she would just go away.

She grinned at him again. But at least she moved a little over to the side and he was able to struggle past her with his luggage.

He dumped everything in the hall and went straight to the shower. The hot water and the shower-gel felt good. When he had finished, he didn’t bother getting dressed, but just stretched out on top of the bed. His bedroom was in the shade now, and with the window just a little open, the room was beautifully cool. Seconds later, he was fast asleep.

When he awoke after two hours, he felt much better. He was no longer tired and he knew exactly what he was going to do about Christina. He was not going to let her go that easily. He tried ringing the landline, and then her mobile. Nothing. Perhaps she was still asleep. Or maybe she’d gone out. Well, he would just go and wait for her.

Susanne was still sitting on the step when he got outside.

‘You going to take me for a ride on your bike, then?’ she asked looking up at him with one eye shut against the sun. ‘Now that you haven’t got to worry about making old green eyes jealous?’

‘Don’t talk to me about Christina’s eyes,’ he said. They’re the most beautiful eyes in the world, he thought.

‘Do you and her actually — you know — do it?’ she asked.

The cheek of her. ‘None of your business,’ he replied.

‘I bet she won’t let you!’ said Susanne. ‘I bet she gets you panting for it. But oh, no, Mummy’s little girl wouldn’t do anything disgusting — like sleep with a man — not until she’s old enough.’

Susanne stood up and sidled over to Jan. She put her arms round him. Jan gently but firmly pushed her away.

‘No, you ought to go with me,’ she said. ‘I’m not such a prude.’ She gave him another of her crooked little smiles.

‘Can you let me through?’ said Jan. ‘I’ve got things to do.’

‘Oh, I don’t know,’ said Susanne. ‘I will if you make it worth my while.’ She undid the top of her shirt to reveal quite a bit of cleavage. She grabbed Jan’s hand and held it over her chest.

He flinched and pulled his hand back.

‘Anyway, if you don’t, I’ll tell her you’ve been feeling me up,’ said Susanne. ‘Well, you have to admit, your hand was just on my chest.’

‘What do you want?’ he sighed.

‘Sleep with me!’ cried Susanne, her eyes gleaming.

‘No way!’ replied Jan, trying again to push past her. He could get past, if he pushed her hard enough, though he didn’t dare hurt her. Knowing her and her family, that would land him in court.

‘Only kidding!’ said Susanne, laughing. ‘Just give me a lift on your motorbike up to the park. I feel like chilling out by the river all day.’

‘All right,’ said Jan. ‘Are you ready? I want to get going.’

‘I’ll be two minutes.’

He took the spare helmet out ready as she went into the apartment. Ten minutes later, she appeared, dressed in nothing but a bikini, a short skirt, flip-flops and sunglasses. She was carrying a towel, a book and a tube of sun cream.

‘You’ll be cold, like that, on the back of the bike,’ he said.

‘Great!’ said Susanne. ‘It’ll save me getting too worked up, clinging on to you. It’ll stop me getting erotic feelings.’

They climbed on to the bike. He felt slightly nauseated as she put her arms round him. Still, it would only be for ten minutes, then he could drop her off at the entrance to the park and make his way as fast as he could back to Christina.

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Thursday, 11 July 2024

Fibbin' Archie

 



Fibbin’ Archie as an experiment

I have wondered for some time about the presence of the Golden Segment in literature. Those of us who like literature certainly recognise that stories presented in literary form have a shape that includes a beginning, a middle that follows certain conventions, but not too strictly, and an end. If these are out of balance we notice. But is this a learned response or is it natural?

The presence of the Fibonacci series in nature tends to suggest that we are dealing with something natural here. This series of numbers can be traced in the patterns of sunflower seeds, in rabbits breeding and in branch formation in plants and trees, to give just a handful of examples. In this experiment I have set out to work with this series. One might sub-title this novel “Writing by Numbers”. The first chapter is one word long, the final one is 28,657. I have labelled each chapter simply by the number in the series it represents.

In doing this I’ve not completely ruled out my normal way of planning fiction. Distilled from various story theories I find work for me, and in particular that of Robert McKee, the shape I favour is:

Inciting incident

Growing complexities (usually three)

Crisis

Climax (This is actually the gap between the crisis and the resolution and generally where all the excitement is. From this point onwards life can never be quite the same again for the protagonist, however the story resolves. Everything up to now was a rehearsal for this big moment.)     

Resolution

A more complex novel – and Fibbin’ Archie is complex – will have sub plots. How sub plots relate to the main plot is also to do with the Golden Segment. Andrew Melrose identifies a plot pyramid in Write For Children and I build upon that work in Writing for Young Adults.      

The Fibonacci series anyway produces the Golden Segment. We see this in the ratio of any two adjacent numbers in the series to their sum. That is there in the formula described above. There are echoes of it in the three act structure and the five act structure from the world of film and television and the slightly different version of this in stage play.

This is how I worked the mathematics out for Archie.

1,597

4,180




Inciting incident

2,584

6,764





4,181

10,945




1

6,765

17,710




2

10,946

28,656




3

17,711

46,367




60019 crisis

28,657

75,024


End



 

Note that the crisis point happens at about word 60019.  So there is a build up to it and then we come back down to the resolution. Once I reached word 46,368 I knew I had to make the stakes higher. 

Christopher Vogler suggests that sometimes we can follow a formula too rigidly. He identified what works for the film industry and based his suggestions for story on Joseph Campbell’s work. Vogler suggests that it is often more satisfying for the consumer when that formula is skewed slightly. The formula is skewed slightly in Archie. Content spills round the edges of word count. It could be, perhaps that numbers aren’t accurate enough to pinpoint exactly when events need to occur. What I have stuck to rigidly here is the word count per section, and then shaped the content to the section.   

At the end of the book I’ll be giving you some more information about what it was like writing this way. I welcome commentary on this project and for once this is a book I don’t mind you giving away for free; the more people who read it the better. By all means put the usual reviews on Amazon and Good reads, good or bad. I’d also welcome direct commentary which I’ll like to publish verbatim or collated in summary if there is a huge response. Please send your comments to g.james1@slaford.ac.uk.

Thank you for taking the time to read Fibbin’ Archie.

You must have noticed the pun by now. It is, of course, deliberate.                      

 

Continuing: 

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He hadn’t got another girlfriend. He didn’t fancy somebody else. He wasn’t fed up of Amanda either. It needed a day off. And he hadn’t wanted to tell her that because she would probably have taken it the wrong way.

Girls did that, girls. They thought that because you didn’t want to be with them 24/7 you’d lost interest. That was stupid. Even married people weren’t together all the time. They went to work didn’t’ they? They went to the shops. And they still met their other friends, didn’t they?

Oh lordy, what was he thinking about -married people? Hey, even Amanda didn’t go that far.

She was getting clingy, though.

“See, you tomorrow then,” he’d said.

“Hey, aren’t we going to hang out after school?” she said.

Then he’d just come out with. “I’ve got to go and see my Grandma. She’s sick.”    


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Archie’s mobile rang. My Old Man’s a Dustman. Red.  

“Hi,” said Archie.

“Done the deed?”

“Yep.”

“Man, you don’t sound convinced.”

Archie swallowed. “I told her Grandma was sick.”

“What, your Grandma? Sick? Never!”

“That’s the trouble. And she might bump into her at the shopping centre.  It’s Grandma’s day for shopping.”

“Oh, and of course. What do girls do when they’ve nothing else to do?  They go shopping. Plonker, or what?”

“I know.”

“What did she say when you told her?”

“Well, she looked all worried. Then she said we should take her some flowers. So I said she was too sick. Then she said we should visit her when she’s a bit better.”

“And what did you say to that?”

“I said it might be a nice idea.”

“You didn’t! You’re worse than a plonker. You’re mental, you.”

“I know. I tell you, they’re not worth the bother, women.”

“You’re fibbin’ again Archie. You know you think she’s worth the bother.”

“I know. But.” Archie noticed another call coming in. “Ollie’s calling.”

“Well, get it then. Tell him to meet us at the corner of Canal Street. In twenty. See ya!”

Archie hoped Red wasn’t going to interrogate him as well. He needn’t have worried. Ollie was more concerned about Red’s daftness than Archie’s.

“Canal Street? What’s he want to do then? Throw stones at the ducks? Man, it’s freezing out.”           

 

                  

  


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Archie grabbed his coat. Ollie was right. It was flipping cold out there and what could they do meeting at the corner of Canal Street? He’d better get a move on if he was going to get there in twenty minutes. There were two main roads to cross. You always had to wait for the green man. He’d better step on it.

It was even colder than he thought. A couple of times he slipped on the ice.

“You want to take more water with it,” shouted Foxy Burnett as he came out of the betting shop of the corner of Glastonbury Road and Bristol Avenue. “You going to your Grandma’s?”

Archie had just almost crashed into a car half parked on the pavement. Sneaky old pervert, he thought as he saw Foxy’s eyes lit up. “She’s probably gone shopping,” he said.

“Oh, well give her my regards when you see her,” said Foxy. “And tell her me offer still stands.  If she’ll have me.”

Gross, thought Archie. He fancies her. Archie felt slightly sick. Foxy was a dirty old beggar and he smelt awful. No chance for him with Grandma. She was much too particular. Thank goodness.

“Well, you will, won’t you?” said Foxy.

“I don’t know what you’re talking about,” said Archie. “Get out of my way, will you? I’m in a hurry.”

“Where’ve you got to get to then? In such a tearing hurry? ”

“Corner of Canal Street. Move, then.”

“Which one?”

Ah. Foxy had a point. Red had not said which corner. And Canal Street was half a mile long. The nearest bit was at least twenty minutes away. Now Foxy had held him up. He’d never make it.

Archie found Red’s number in his phone. Darn! It was engaged. But at last Foxy had moved out of the way now.

Archie tried Ollie.

Ollie answered. “Hiya. What’s keeping you?”

“Which corner?”

“Bottom Row. Where do you think? Durr! You wouldn’t imagine he’d want to move far from home, would you?”

“Okay. See you soon.”

“Move it, man. He’s nearly finished talking to his new girlfriend. He’ll get stroppy if you’re not here in five.”

“I’m doing my best, man.”

Ollie finished the call.

Red had a girlfriend. When did that happen?  

    

                      


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Archie recognised Red’s red hoodie as soon as he turned into Canal Street. Red was still on his phone. He moved away from the other two. 

“You took your time, said Ollie.

“I came as fast as I could,” said Archie. “Foxy Burnett tripped me up. “

“What did he want?”

“My grandma.”

“You’re a having a laugh, ain’t ya?”

Archie shrugged.

“Yeah, well. Feisty old gal, your grandma. He ain’t got much chance.”  Red, who was still on the phone was now walking towards them. “Girlfriend,” Ollie mouthed.

“Who is she?”

Ollie shrugged. “Just some bird.” 

“Rightio,” said Red. “You take care. Can’t wait to see you again. Kiss kiss.” He ended the call. “Right, chaps, he said.

“I thought you weren’t into girls,” said Archie. Suddenly he was missing Amanda. He closed his eyes. She always smelt so nice. Just think, if he hadn’t agreed to come on this jaunt they’d probably be snogging by now.

“Not as much as you, me old lovely. Women have got to know their place. You can’t be with them all the time. You’ve got to make time for your mates.”

Archie opened his eyes again. Red was right. And he remembered what a relief it was to have some time away from her. The snogging was all right.  Great in fact. And she was a really nice person. Something stirred down below. God, not a stiffy now.  Yeah, and the frustration. 

And there was all the other stuff.  Remembering to be polite, watching your manners, listening to her chuntering on and on about her family as well as asking him about hers all the time.  Problem solved. Stiffy gone.

Anyway didn’t she want to spend some time with her girlfriends?

But he still didn’t get it about Red. “So, who is she?”

Red tapped the side of his nose.  “That’s for me to know and for you not to find out. But she’s a corker. Blond. Tall. Slim. Big tits. Gorgeous.”

Archie squirmed. He wouldn’t ever talk about Amanda that way.

Ollie was frowning as well. “I can’t see what the fuss is all about.  My mum’s got big tits but I don’t fancy her.”

Red cuffed his head. “Plonker! You’re just jealous of me and Archie because we can pull the women.”

“Is she from our school?” asked Archie.

“No she ain’t. Out of your league mate. So don’t even think about it.”

Archie was puzzled. He’d got a girlfriend, so why would he want to mess around with Red’s? Especially as Red had no intention of letting him and Ollie anywhere near her. “I wouldn’t dare,” he mumbled.

“I didn’t mean you. I meant him.” Red nodded towards Ollie. He put his arm round Archie’s and Ollie’s necks. “Now then, chaps. I thought we ought to meet because this is getting serious now.  Two of us pulled in by the deadly charms of the fairer sex.”

“You what?” said Ollie.

“Two of us taken in by the delights of carnal knowledge of the glamorous gals.” He ruffled Ollie’s hair. “Don’t you fret. Your turn will come.” Red paused. “Actually, do you have anybody in mind?”

Ollie’s face went almost as red as Red’s hoodie. “Millie Davies,” he mumbled.

Archie had to suppress a laugh. He’d been at junior school with Millie and she used to wear owly specs with a broken frame held together with a plaster. Still, he supposed now that she wore contacts and short skirts she looked a bit better. In fact, she’d got very nice legs.

“Then Millie Davies it shall be,” said Red. “But first we must swear the oath of the independent gentlemen.”      

 

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